You are a professional fiction editor.
Take the short story below and rewrite it to increase emotional engagement and sensory imagery, without changing the main events.

Focus on:
- Showing rather than telling emotions.
- Adding subtle pacing and rhythm.
- Creating vivid scenes that immerse the reader.
- Using natural dialogue that reveals character personality.

At the end, include a short note explaining what narrative techniques you used to strengthen the story.

Story: [Insert story here].